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Obsidian and Winifred were dead.

. . . . . .

Ob and Wini were dead, and not even buried. There hadn't been time. They were just sitting in their pokeballs, corpses taking up empty space. Her corpses- no, her pokemon- her starter and her first gone forever, their last mark a spec on the ever changing desert.

Cally could almost see the sand and winds shifting, erasing any trace of their valor, their existence, and finally taking them away from her forever.

They said that the desert consumed all, and now she could see that it was only partly true. The war- the awful, godforsaken war- had taken the rest. Her pokemon, her family, her region, her pride as a trainer, everything. All that she had.

She wondered what else it would take away.
:iconari-thecookiequeen:
Second thing I've written about Cally, and it happens to be the shortest piece I've written so far. Its only about a page in my notebook and half a page on Word.

It always seems like everything I write about Cally shows her in a negative light. Give Up had her as a vindictive bitch, and now she's wallowing in self pity! And here I've always thought of her as a cheerful girl.
I wonder if my writing is trying to tell me something. . .

-for the answer to the bottom question, see Give Up-

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:iconvythefirst:
. . .it was right next to Give Up. You told me that you wouldn't take the other number because it was too close to another one haha!

And, yes, listen to your subconscious, it has a crazy amount of wisdom. *_*
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:iconari-thecookiequeen:
Yeah, I realized that after, but I'd already gotten an idea for it, so I said 'screw it'. XDD Plus, that collumn around had like four in it. This ones only had two.

XDD Yeah, but that means completely changing the character.
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:iconvythefirst:
Fine, fine. xDD

Well, it really just depends on her role in the story/rp. You say that she's supposed to be the happy, optimistic one of the group, but your writing has shown a more bitter, sorrowful side to her. Frankly, I feel like Marie's personality somewhat overlaps that of Cally, so a little change wouldn't be totally bad in my opinion. But it's up to you. xD
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:iconari-thecookiequeen:
True, but you have to realize that Cally and Marie are almost never seen together. (They meet maybe a total of two times.) Plus, their types of optomism are completely different.
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:iconvythefirst:
Well, okay, then don't change her. ^_^ She's really your character, and again I haven't seen all aspects of her personality yet, so I'd trust your judgement more than my own, haha.
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